Japanese life 4

2017-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

After taking out our baggage, we went to the supermarket near our accommodation. On the way to there, we thought how we enjoyed our life in the expensive accommodation perfectly. So, we determined to buy very delicious food in the market. When we arrived there, we saw shopping carts that were different from our country's. In our country, carts and baskets are combined but these are separate in Japan. So, If you go to the counter to pay for your commodities, you should take out them in the cart and put on the counter in Korea but only take out the basket in the cart and put on it in Japan. Returning to the main point, we looked around in the supermarket to buy delicious food, I want to find many sushi and sashimi there. Indeed, Can I find them? please, expect the next series.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
This is like a saga [이름]. It\'s good. I think you could write a short story in English next time and publish it on the internet. Anyway, I\'ll eagerly wait for the next part.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
After taking out our baggage, we went to the supermarket near our accommodation.
>> correct!
On the way to there, we thought how we enjoyed our life in the expensive accommodation perfectly.
>> On the way there, we thought of how we could enjoy our life in the expensive accommodation perfectly.
So, we determined to buy very delicious food in the market.
>> So, we were determined to buy very delicious food in the market.
When we arrived there, we saw shopping carts that were different from our country\'s.
>> correct!
In our country, carts and baskets are combined but these are separate in Japan.
>> correct!
So, If you go to the counter to pay for your commodities, you should take out them in the cart and put on the counter in Korea but only take out the basket in the cart and put on it in Japan.
>> If you go to the counter to pay for your commodities, you should take them out from the cart and put them on the counter in Korea. But in Japan, you only take out the basket in the cart and put it on the counter.
Returning to the main point, we looked around in the supermarket to buy delicious food, I wanted to find many sushi and sashimi there.
>> correct!
Indeed, Can I find them? please, expect the next series.
>> correct!

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