Japanese life 8

2017-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

When we came back our accommodation, it was very clean and our bedding was set, because they were services in the expensive hotel. So, we were very satisfied with them. To enjoy our night life, we decided to go to a supermarket near it. Although I wanted to eat a kind of sashimi and sushi, there are no them. To replace them with anohter things, we bought snacks, beverages, beers, instant noodles and so on. When we came back our accommodation, we set our eating things and took them out beside our individual hot spring. While we were being in it, we enjoyed eating them with a beer. So, we feel relaxed as well as were full. After enjoying, we were so tired and took a shower individually. We turned off the light in our accommodation and got into our bedding. The bedding was so thick. So, we felt warm, moreover, hot. Anyway, we slept well there.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
See you!
Take care!
~T.Lynn
When we came back our accommodation, it was very clean and our bedding was set, because they were services in the expensive hotel.
>> When we came back to our accommodation, it was very clean and our bedding was set, because they have room service in the expensive hotel.
So, we were very satisfied with them.
>> correct!
>> We were very satisfied with their service.
To enjoy our night life, we decided to go to a supermarket near it.
>> correct!
Although I wanted to eat a kind of sashimi and sushi, there are no them.
>> Although I wanted to eat a kind of sashimi and sushi, we couldn\'t find them.
To replace them with anohter things, we bought snacks, beverages, beers, instant noodles and so on.
>> To replace them with other things, we bought snacks, beverages, beers, instant noodles and so on.
When we came back our accommodation, we set our eating things and took them out beside our individual hot spring.
>> When we came back to our accommodation, we set our dining things and took them out beside our individual hot spring.
While we were being in it, we enjoyed eating them with a beer.
>> While we were in it, we enjoyed eating them with a beer.
So, we feel relaxed as well as were full. After enjoying, we were so tired and took a shower individually.
>> So, we feel relaxed as well as very full. After enjoying that, we were so tired and took a shower individually.
We turned off the light in our accommodation and got into our bedding. The bedding was so thick. So, we felt warm, moreover, hot.
>> We turned off the light in our accommodation and got into our bedding. The bedding was so thick. So, we felt warm, moreover, hot.
Anyway, we slept well there.
>> Anyway, we slept well there.

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