Jeff homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
~ . ~) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think making money is not the best way to be successful.
We need family, happiess,jobs and friends.
The money isn't all. If we have alot of
money but don't have happiness, people
want more money earning. Then they would be greedy at money,
So I think It is not a good idea.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jeff!
I totally agree with you! Money isn\'t all that matters!
Thank you for coming up with meaningful sentences. Again, just be careful with your spelling and sentence organization.
Have a great weekend ahead!
Teacher Lexi :)
Here are my corrections:
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
~ . ~) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think making money is not the best way to be successful.
>>Correct :)
>>OR: I think earning a lot of money doesn\'t mean success.
We need family, happiess,jobs and friends.
>>Correct (Spelling check - happiness)
>>OR: We need our family, happiness, jobs and friends.
The money isn\'t all.
>>Money isn\'t all that matters.
If we have alot of money but don\'t have happiness, people want more money earning.
>>If we have a lot of money but not happy, people might just want earning more.
Then they would be greedy at money, So I think It is not a good idea.
>>Then people would be greedy with money so I think it\'s not a good idea.
I totally agree with you! Money isn\'t all that matters!
Thank you for coming up with meaningful sentences. Again, just be careful with your spelling and sentence organization.
Have a great weekend ahead!
Teacher Lexi :)
Here are my corrections:
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
~ . ~) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think making money is not the best way to be successful.
>>Correct :)
>>OR: I think earning a lot of money doesn\'t mean success.
We need family, happiess,jobs and friends.
>>Correct (Spelling check - happiness)
>>OR: We need our family, happiness, jobs and friends.
The money isn\'t all.
>>Money isn\'t all that matters.
If we have alot of money but don\'t have happiness, people want more money earning.
>>If we have a lot of money but not happy, people might just want earning more.
Then they would be greedy at money, So I think It is not a good idea.
>>Then people would be greedy with money so I think it\'s not a good idea.
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