Jeny~(2)
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Jewel,
Nice job for [이름] to compose a composition about what [이름]\'ve watched. In this way [이름] could improve [이름]r skills in expressing [이름] opinion about a certain topic.
T. Jeny
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>>Continuation
They became friends and heard about fast of jungle from Leo\'s father, who emperior of jungle.
>>They became friends and heard about whose the jungle\'s fastest runner from Leo\'s father, who is the emperor of the jungle.
But he died because tried to protect his companion from humans.
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But he died because he tried to protect his companions from humans.
And the founder of artificial jungle, decide that destroy the part of jungle and kill animals who live there because of pest.
>>The founder of the artificial jungle, decided to destroy part of the jungle and killed the animals because of the pests.
Because It\'s near the estimate of UN, and he want to took good grade and approval of his \"business\" .
>>The area was near UN so he wanted to get good grades and the approval of his \"business.\"
But Leo and friends don\'t stay.
>>But Leo and friends didn\'t stay.
Leo get courage by help of Kenichi and being leader of jungle replace his father.
>>Leo got the courage by the help of Kenichi, who replaced his father as the leader of the jungle.
They go to the humans station by help of Kenichi. In that course, humans and animals confront.
>>They went to the humans station by the help of Kenichi.
In that course, humans and animals confront.
>>In that incident, humans and animals confronted.
People are wounded and fainted because of explosion of facilities.
>>People were wounded and fainted because the facilities exploded.
Animals take care them and go front, front, to real jungle.
>>The animals went to the real jungle.
I guess it can be just childish movie on the one hand before watchig.
>>Before watching the movie I thought it was just for children.
But after I saw the movie, I change my mind entirely.
>>But after I saw the movie, I entirely changed my mind.
particulary the end of the movie, not fisnished with happy ending, very impressive.
>>Especially, it didn\'t had a happy ending but it was very impressive.
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