Jeonbuk hyeonde
학생이 쓴 원문
Jeonbuk team won the Korea K-league this year.Jeonbuk has a three good players. My team is FC Seoul but Seoul was 4th team.Jeonbuk won many times. And Jeonbuk recorded 400 won.Suewon was 1ranking team but Lee Jae sung make an effort and finally won this competition.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]^^
Good evening.
Congratulation for gaining the 4th place in the competition!
Not being in the 1st place means, you are wiser than the other.
Keep it up!
Goodluck to your team!
I will see you soon in class [이름]! ^^
Have a great day ahead. :)
~~ Teacher Kris
Jeonbuk team won the Korea K-league this year.
>>> Correct
Jeonbuk has a three good players.
>>> Jeonbuk has three good players.
My team is FC Seoul but Seoul was 4th team.
>>> My team is FC Seoul.
>>> DID YOU MEAN: Team FC Seoul got the 4th rank.
Jeonbuk won many times.
>>> Correct
And Jeonbuk recorded 400 won.
>>> Jeonbuk has a record of 400 wins.
OR;
>>> Based on the record, Jeonbuk wins 400 times.
Suewon was 1ranking team but Lee Jae sung make an effort and finally won this competition.
>>> Team Suewon always got the rank 1 but, not this time. Team Lee Jae Sung made an effort and finally won this competition.
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