job
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Korea is indeveloped country in terms of occupation awareness of people.
Discrimination and distincion are different in the jobs.
We need all kinds of jobs and roles in the society for our life.
We have to respect or admit job of other.
At least we should not ignore them the reason that thet have low-paying jobs.
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Korea is indeveloped country in terms of occupation awareness of people.>>> Korea is an undeveloped country in terms of occupation awareness.
Discrimination and distincion are different in the jobs.
Discrimination and distincion are different in the jobs.
>>> Discrimination and distinction in jobs are different.
We need all kinds of jobs and roles in the society for our life.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> All kinds of jobs and roles are important in a society.
>>> Each job has different roles and functions in the society.
We have to respect or admit job of other.
We have to respect or admit job of other.
>>> We have to respect and acknowledge each other\'s jobs.
At least we should not ignore them the reason that thet have low-paying job
At least we should not ignore them the reason that thet have low-paying job
>>> At least we should not ignore those people who have reasons for having a low-paying job.
>>> Anyhow, we should not look down on those people who are working differently from our jobs.
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