Job interview-1
학생이 쓴 원문
These day I have been considering to change my job.
The reason why I want to change my job is that I want to do more challangable work than current job. I have worked for this company for two years. However ther market of this company i work for is very small. the whole makret value is under 50.000.000 dolar, whichi means I may not have dynamic experience and opportunity to develop myself for high-experienced expertise for foreign sales marketer. I am interested in a job involved in making B-to-B product. Moreover, The job position I want to be posted is foreing market sales or market strateger. In my current job, I am responsible for foreign market and making stratege. Therfore, I want to change new job related with both field, foreing market sales or market strateger.
강사 첨삭
Hello MR. KIM,
I am sorry to hear that you are not satisfied with your current job.
I have experienced that kind of feeling so I looked for a new job.
You won\'t bring out the best in you if you are not happy in your current work.
Teacher Sophia ^^
Here are your corrections:
These day I have been considering to change my job.
>> These days, I am considering to change my job.The reason why I want to change my job is that I want to do more challangable work than current job.
>> The reason why I want to change my job is because I want to do more challenging works than my current job.
I have worked for this company for two years.
>> I have been working in this company for two years.
However ther market of this company i work for is very small.
>> However, the market of this company is too small.
the whole makret value is under 50.000.000 dolar, whichi means I may not have dynamic experience and opportunity to develop myself for high-experienced expertise for foreign sales marketer.
>> The whole market value has an estimate of 50,000,000 dollars which means that I won\'t have the opportunity to develop my skills and potentials as a foreign sales market director.
I am interested in a job involved in making B-to-B product.
>> I am interested in a job that involves B-to-B products.
Moreover, The job position I want to be posted is foreing market sales or market strateger.
>> I want to be deal with foreign market sales or market strategies.
In my current job, I am responsible for foreign market and making stratege.
>> In my current job, I am responsible with the foreign market and market strategies.
Therfore, I want to change new job related with both field, foreing market sales or market strateger.
>> Therefore, I want to seek a new job related to both field, foreign market sales and market strategy.
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