Job Interview....
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all, Thank you for giving me this interview opportunity.
\"My name is ooo.
I doble majored in Medical tourism. \"
\"But, As I became more interested in planning some conventions and business consultations,
I\'m applying for the \"\"MICE and Consultation inovation\'. \"
I have a experience in a internships. Such as planning exhibitions and side events.
This experience taught me - communication skills and global basic competence.
I\'m literally responsible and passionate about my work.
\"I believe my hands-on experience will be a great asset to your company.
I appreciate to give me like this opportunity again.\"
강사 첨삭
Hello Leo,
Thank you for sharing your introduction spiel. Honestly, I didn\'t completely understand the first 3 sentences. Therefore, please allow me to share my version.
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I would like to begin by saying thank you for giving me the chance to do this interview.
Hello, my name is ooo. I studied in (WHERE?)_____ and obtained my bachelor\'s degree in Medical Tourism. I worked as an intern where I planned side events and exhibitions to finish the course requirements. My interest in managing some conferences and business meetings has grown, which is why I\'d like to fill a job in MICE and consultancy innovation. I gained communication skills and global fundamental competence from this experience. Furthermore, I am currently enrolled in an online English course to elevate my confidence. I genuinely take responsibility for my work and enjoy it. I believe my practical experience will be very beneficial to your company. Thank you for providing me with this opportunity once more.
-Chammy
First of all, Thank you for giving me this interview opportunity.
\"My name is ooo.
\"My name is ooo.
>>Correct
I doble majored in Medical tourism. \"
>>I doubled my major in Medical Tourism,
\"But, As I became more interested in planning some conventions and business consultations,
>>As I became more interested in planning some conventions and business consultations,
I\'m applying for the \"\"MICE and Consultation inovation\'. \"
>>I\'m applying for the \"MICE and Consultation Innovation. \"
I have a experience in a internships. Such as planning exhibitions and side events.
>>I have an experience in internships. Such as planning exhibitions and side events.
This experience taught me - communication skills and global basic competence.
>>This experience taught me communication skills and global basic competence.
I\'m literally responsible and passionate about my work.
>>I\'m responsible and passionate about my work.
I believe my hands-on experience will be a great asset to your company.
>>Correct
I appreciate to give me like this opportunity again.
>>I appreciate you giving me this opportunity again.
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