Job selection

Hi [이름]!

A wonderful Monday to you!

Thank you for sending me your composition. As you know, writing is an excellent way to practice grammar and vocabulary. Well, have you heard of this proverb , \"Do your best and God will do the rest\"? I believe in everything that I do, this proverb applies. Have a good day!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

The most important consideration things is money and aptitude, when people choosing the job.

>> The important things to consider when choosing a job is money and aptitude.

I wanted to be a newspaper writer in my childhood.

>> I wanted to be a newspaper writer when I was a child.

OR>> I wanted to be a journalist when I was a child.

I achieved my goal before 28 years ago.

>> I achieved my goal 28 years ago.

OR>> I was able to achieve my dream 28 years ago.

But people is considering what should they choose. I was chosen a aptitude.

>>When people were considering what to choose, I chose aptitude.

The money(income) was followed.

>> The money or income followed.

I think that is just it.

>> correct

In choosing a jobs, the first thing is both make a many money and have a aptitude.

>>In choosing a job, you must consider first  the income.

That is icing on the cake.

>>correct

Korean language is called kumsangcheomhwa(금상첨화).

>>correct (But I think you can delete this sentence)

Second thing is to fit(have) a aptitude. Or to make a many income.

>>The second thing is to consider  your aptitude.

The worst thing is to make a little money and not to have a aptitude.

>>The worst thing is to make little money because you don\'t have the aptitude.

But such opportunities never come to me. No one knows the world.

>>correct

Keep in mind, there were only one thing.

>>Keep in mind only one thing.

You come to opportunity, if you do your best.

>>Opportunity comes, if you do your best.

There is proverb which say, heaven helps those who help themseves.

>> There is a proverb which says, \"Heaven helps those who help themselves\".

Do your best, the jobs you want is yours, the income you want in yours.

>>Do your best and the job you want and the income that you want is yours.

 This is definitely clear.

>>correct