Jobs that men do better than women

2016-05-13 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Men is different from women. Men is biologically stronger than women. Men is stronger, more tough, more vicious, more wild, more impetuous than women. That is a result of evolution. Thousand of years, Men must be hunting for his family. On the other hand, women was engaged in housekeeping like a childcare and housework. Wonen is more soft and delicate than men. Therefore men could be hard work better than women. Women do soft work better than men. Also in jobs, men is an outside orientation, women is inside orientation. As a result, the jobs of men have a lawyer, a politician, a doctor, and a soldier and so on. Women has a teacher, a nurse, a stewardess, etc. History is consist of male-centered story. And so, it is not herstory but history. But the world is changing now. Women in many areas was intruded upon men. The right of women is explosively extending. The number of women incresing In many areas, Women is more smater and stronger. I wonder really be this was the right things.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

 

Happy Friday!

Thank you for making your homework. Gender roles had changed over time. You can see women in industries where it was dominated by men before. You could also see men in industries where mostly women worked before. In the future, what do you think will happen?

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

Men is different from women.

>>Men ARE different from women.

Men is biologically stronger than women.

>>Men ARE biologically stronger than women.

Men is stronger, more tough, more vicious, more wild, more impetuous than women.

>>Men ARE stronger, tougher, more vicious, wilder, and more impetuous than women.

That is a result of evolution.

>>correct

Thousand of years, Men must be hunting for his family.

>>Thousand of years ago, men must hunt for their families.

On the other hand, women was engaged in housekeeping like a childcare and housework.

>>On the other hand, women were engaged in housekeeping and childcare.

Wonen is more soft and delicate than men.

>>Women ARE softer and more delicate than men.

Therefore men could be hard work better than women.

>>Therefore men could work harder than women.

Women do soft work better than men. Also in jobs, men is an outside orientation, women is inside orientation.

>>Women are better than men in jobs which does not require strength. Also, men are suited to working outside while women are better in jobs where you stay inside.

 As a result, the jobs of men have a lawyer, a politician, a doctor, and a soldier and so on.

>>As a result, men work as lawyers, politicians, doctors, soldiers and so on.

Women has a teacher, a nurse, a stewardess, etc.
>>While women work as teachers, nurses, stewardesses, etc.

History is consist of male-centered story. And so, it is not herstory but history.

>>correct

But the world is changing now.

>>correct

Women in many areas was intruded upon men.

>> Women work now in many areas where only men worked before.

The right of women is explosively extending.

>>correct

The number of women incresing In many areas, Women is more smater and stronger.

>>The number of women is increasing in many areas. Women ARE smarter and stronger.

 I wonder really be this was the right things.

>>I really wonder if this is right.

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