Jpanese life 9

2017-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

In the store, we bought many jellies and snacks as souvenirs. Moreover, we bought expensive things such as the doll that a famous manufacturer made and character pajamas. The dolls were for my friends's birthday and the pajamas were for us. After enjoy overspening there, we came back to our accommodation. At that time, we were hungry. So we decided to buy some sushis and sashimis and eat in our accommodation. To enjoy being full, we bought them in supermarket, not the store made them specially. In Japan, they were very delicious, although you bought them in the market. When we came back to our accommodation, we divided them into eating in the evening today and in the morning tomorrow. I enjoyed them with a beer and she did them with a beverage, because she turned red when we drank an alcohol. To digest them, we decided to go out and shop in a character shop, she liked many cute characters. Please the next series

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!
And the adventure continues!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
In the store, we bought many jellies and snacks as souvenirs.
>>correct!
Moreover, we bought expensive things such as the doll that a famous manufacturer made and character pajamas.
>> correct!
The dolls were for my friend\'s birthday and the pajamas were for us.
>> correct!
After enjoy overspending there, we came back to our accommodation.
>> correct!
At that time, we were hungry.
>> correct!
So we decided to buy some sushis and sashimis and eat in our accommodation.
>> correct!
To enjoy being full, we bought them in supermarket, not the store made them specially.
>> To fully enjoy it, we bought them from the supermarket not the specially made one from the store.
In Japan, they were very delicious, although you bought them in the market.
>> correct!
When we came back to our accommodation, we divided them into eating in the evening today and in the morning tomorrow.
>> correct!
I enjoyed them with a beer and she did them with a beverage, because she turned red when we drank an alcohol.
>> I enjoyed them with a beer and she ate them with another beverage, because she turns red when she drinks an alcohol.
To digest them, we decided to go out and shop in a character shop, she liked many cute characters.
>> correct!
Please the next series
>> Please look forward to the next series.

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