Julie's diary on 1st AUG.

2014-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Theresa

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It's first day of AUG and I visited a customer on business this morning. They don't want to deal with our company anymore because our rate is to high than other competitor. My boss, salesman and I had to wait for 2 hours because they had the morning worship at the first day of every month. We didn't know it so we wasted our valuable time. Anyway we met the person in charge and heard what he were dissatisfied with our service. All our staffs did our best for this customer. It is really difficult to please everybody/every customer. But today's Friday! My son and my mother will go to hometown tomorrow and my husband will go to work. So I'll watch movie with my friend tomorrow. I'll be free and enjoy my weekend !

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Hi Julie,Thank you for sending this to me.I am very happy that you will watch a movie on the weekend.Yes, that is true it is really hard to please everybody whether a customer}: someone who pays for goods or services
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{cotumer}: wrong word\">customer or not.Sometimes we will end up disappointed}: disappointingly unsuccessful
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{dissappointed}: wrong word\">disappointed.But that\'s} replaces
{thta\'s}: wrong word\">that\'s life, we really have to do our best to please them.Well see you in class.~Teacher TheresaIt\'s first day of AUG and I visited a customer on business this morning. >> It\'s the first day of AUG. and I visited a customer on business this morning. They don\'t want to deal with our company anymore because our rate is to high than other competitor.>> They don\'t want to deal with our company anymore because our rate is too high than our other competitor. My boss, salesman and I had to wait for 2 hours because they had the morning worship at the first day of every month.>> My boss, the salesman and I had to wait for 2 hours because they had the morning worship at the first day of every month.We didn\'t know it so we wasted our valuable time.>> We didn\'t know it so we just wasted our valuable time.Anyway we met the person in charge and heard what he were dissatisfied with our service.>> Correct. OR: >> Anyway we met the person in charge and learned what he were dissatisfied with our service.All our staffs did our best for this customer.>> Correct. OR: >> All our staffs did our best for this customer of our\'s .It is really difficult to please everybody/every customer.>> Correct. OR: >> It is really difficult to please everyone of our costumers.But today\'s Friday! >> Correct. OR: >> But it\'s Friday today.My son and my mother will go to hometown tomorrow and my husband will go to work. >> My son and my mother will go to our hometown tomorrow and my husband will go to work.So I\'ll watch movie with my friend tomorrow. >> So I\'ll watch a movie with my friend tomorrow.I\'ll be free and enjoy my weekend ! >> I\'ll be free and I will enjoy my weekend !

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