July!!!!
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continuing...
I want to study more about art therapist's activities in developed countries which have a good social selfare organs. In conclusion, I will study English and Art very hard, and then, I will be an excellent 'art therapist' who cures handicapped people like my brother. I think that's the way to help this society with my job.
WOW FINISH!!!!! GOOD NIGHT JULY :)
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Hello to you [이름]!
Thank you for this!
I hope you enjoy reading through!
Take care!
_Julie_
continuing...>>Continuation...I want to study more about art therapist's activities in developed countries which have a good social selfare organs.
>>I want to study more about art therapist's activities in developed countries which have a good social welfare organs.
In conclusion, I will study English and Art very hard, and then, I will be an excellent 'art therapist' who cures handicapped people like my brother.
>>Correct!
I think that's the way to help this society with my job.>>Correct!WOW FINISH!!!!!
>>Wow, it's finished!
GOOD NIGHT JULY :)
>>Goodnight Julie^^
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