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continuing... To become an excellent art therapist, I need to study a lot. Above all, the most important thing is getting the ability to speak English fluently. The first reason is that I have to see the broad world. To understand and help the patients in other countries as well as in Korea,I have to communicate with them. So,fluent in English is mandatory. Next, there are many Korean versions. But if I want to get deeper and broder information of art therapist, I need to possess fluent reading skill in English. Lastly, I learned that the developed countries have a better social welfare organs than Korea. When I was 14 years old, I have been Canada for one month. To be continued..

Thank you so much for sending this continuation of your composition. I really appreciate your writing. Keep up the good work!   continuing... >>Continuation……To become an excellent art therapist, I need to study a lot. >>correct Above all, the most important thing is getting the ability to speak English fluently. >>correct The first reason is that I have to see the broad world. >>correct >>The first reason is that I have to see the world broadly. To understand and help the patients in other countries as well as in Korea,I have to communicate with them. >>correct So,fluent in English is mandatory. >>So, fluency in English is mandatory. Next, there are many Korean versions. >>correct >>OR: Next, there are many Korean translations. But if I want to get deeper and broder information of art therapist, I need to possess fluent reading skill in English. >>But  if I want to get deeper and broader informations about being an art therapist, I need to possess a fluent reading skill in English. Lastly, I learned that the developed countries have a better social welfare organs than Korea. >>Lastly, I learned that the developed countries have better social welfare organizations than Korea. When I was 14 years old, I have been Canada for one month.>>When I was 14 years old, I have stayed in Canada for one month.To be continued.. >>correct