June 11, Homework
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ESSAY: Some people say that a person’s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?.
I generally agree with this opinion. I think children always are influenced by their parent’s thinking, habit, a way of life, economic environment, educational level, etc. By that’s reason, I think that these success also is influenced from their parents. Especially, if their parent’s economic environment is good and has much money, children can have opportunities about education, school, business, community with people, etc. By these things, they can have more opportunities to succeed.
강사 첨삭
Hi Sir James ~! ^^ It\'s Monday! I hope you were refreshed from your weekend! Thanks for doing your essay. Keep it up~
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I generally agree with this opinion.
>>> CORRECT
I think children always are influenced by their parent’s thinking, habit, a way of life, economic environment, educational level, etc.
>>> I think children are always influenced by their parent’s thinking, habit, a way of life, economic environment, educational level, etc.
By that’s reason, I think that these success also is influenced from their parents.
>>> With these reasons, I think children\'s success is also influenced by their parents.
Especially, if their parent’s economic environment is good and has much money, children can have opportunities about education, school, business, community with people, etc.
>>> CORRECT
With these things, they can have more opportunities to succeed.
>>> CORRECT
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