Just my personal opinion :)

2021-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In this generation, personal priority be come focusing to me. When some couple have a baby, they should to lose so many thing and need more power. And prepare clothes, furniture, enviroment for baby. I haven talk with friends with this topic, they said \"If I have a baby, I think I feel getting more confused.\" And then I think, I agreed. Even my self, i want just have fun time with my future husband with out baby. But I don\'t know when I\'ll changed my mind.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann:)

A growing number of couples who have been married for five years or less, especially those in which both partners work, are not having children. This is actually a personal choice but there are some consequences to the society, which is the decreasing economy. 

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In this generation, personal priority be come focusing to me.
>> In this generation, people are prioritizing themselves. 

When some couple have a baby, they should to lose so many thing and need more power.
>> When some couples have a baby, they should sacrifices a lot of things. 

And prepare clothes, furniture, enviroment for baby.
>> They also need to prepare clothes, furniture and a suitable environment for the baby. 

I haven talk with friends with this topic, they said \"If I have a baby, I think I feel getting more confused.\"
>> I have talked with my friends regarding this topic and hey said \"If I have a baby, I think I will get more confused. 

And then I think, I agreed.
>> I agreed with them. 

Even my self, i want just have fun time with my future husband with out baby.
>> Even myself, I just want to fun with my future husband without baby.

But I don\'t know when I\'ll changed my mind.
>> But I don\'t know if I\'ll changed my mind.

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