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2020-02-24 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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Hm... after I was born in 30 years... My life is so boring. I want to get some new experiences. So I try to learn Guitar and Badminton and do lots of simple things... But feeling is nothing special. Working, reading book, drinking, etc make me be enjoyed. Only enjoyed.... nothing else. Longtime ago I have heard GOD has a plan. What plan does GOD has for me... Do you have Bucket list? Please share with me and what makes you be happy? Hm..... Everyday is new day. Want to do every day. I hope I do some specials thing everyday with lots of exciting feelings. Tomorrow I must go to work as usual I did, I hope I found some meaningful things.... How do you live? Why do you live? Hm...... If you have a good idea please share with me. Hope you have a good night! Ah I would like to know your Bucket list if you have.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Thank you for submitting your composition to me.

I really appreciate it.

To be honest, I don\'t know how to make things enjoyable or exciting.

I think my life is also a simple one.

However, maybe we can try to do things we haven\'t done before.

Of course they should be good things. I think it will help us realize that we can still do other stuff which we thought we can\'t.

I think it\'s not bad to try them all until we find something satisfying.

Let\'s try to meet new people as well. Good people.

I think meeting new people would help us realize some things about ourselves and about others too.

In my opinion, it\'s a process of learning life and ourselves through others.

Why do I live? God\'s plan for me?

I still don\'t know what God\'s ultimate plan is but I try to live my life to the fullest I can.

I try to become a person which is good for myself and to others especially to my family and friends.

I try to do that everyday. I also try to talk and meet new people. As I said, they help me learn more about life especially of those that I don\'t know.

My bucket list?

I want to travel- domestic or overseas. I want to travel with my family.

I want to try extreme rides or activities even if I\'m scared. hahaha

I want to volunteer in a charity for kids.

There\'s a lot. But my ultimate hope is just be happy. Really happy. ^^

I wish that you will find your answers too and live a life full of happiness and no regrets. ^^

Have a good night! ^^

~Teacher Gina

Hm... after I was born in 30 years..
>> After 30 years when I was born...
My life is so boring.
>> CORRECT.

I want to get some new experiences.

>> CORRECT.

So I try to learn Guitar and Badminton and do lots of simple things...

>> CORRECT.
But feeling is nothing special.

>> But I did not feel anything special.

>> Or: But there was no special feeling.

Working, reading book, drinking, etc make me be enjoyed.

>> Working, reading a book, drink, etc made me enjoy.

Only enjoyed.... nothing else.

>> I only enjoyed.... nothing else.

Longtime ago I have heard GOD has a plan.

>> A long time ago, I heard that God has a plan.
What plan does GOD has for me...
>> What plan does God has for me?

Do you have Bucket list?

>> Do you have a bucket list?

Please share with me and what makes you be happy? Hm.....

>> Please share it with me and what will make you happy?

Everyday is new day.

>> Everyday is a new day.

Want to do every day.

>> I want to do something everyday.

I hope I do some specials thing everyday with lots of exciting feelings.

>> I hope to do some special things everyday which will make me feel a lot of excitement.

Tomorrow I must go to work as usual I did, I hope I found some meaningful things....

>> I must go to work tomorrow as usual as I always did. I hope to fine some meaningful things...

How do you live? Why do you live?
Hm......

>> CORRECT.

If you have a good idea please share with me.

>> If you have a good idea please share it with me.
Hope you have a good night!
>> CORRECT.
Ah I would like to know your Bucket list if you have.

>> CORRECT.

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