Juvenile crimes are getting serious

2010-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Nicole

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Juvenile crimes tend to be serious nowadays. In my opinion, the most significant reason for this trend is that they are exposed to a violent environment through video games, movies, or drama. They haven't set their values so that they can't figure something important out. Moreover, they are on the stage when they are having a very serious relationship with their peer group. They don't want to be out of the group. So, they participate in what their peers are doing without thinking twice. In addition, when they face the situation which they should refuse to do, it is hard for them to say no. Korean society should take this seriously and set plans to lead them to the right way since it can't just put the responsibility on thier parents.

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Good day [이름] I agree with you, the society and parents should both help each other to lessen the constant rising of juvenile crime. Happy Friday and see you again next week. Nicole   Juvenile crimes tend to be serious nowadays. >> Correct In my opinion, the most significant reason for this trend is that they are exposed to a violent environment through video games, movies, or drama. >> In my opinion, the most significant reason for this trend is that they are exposed to a violent environment through video games, movies, or dramas. They haven't set their values so that they can't figure something important out. >> They haven't set their values so that they can't figure something important.  Moreover, they are on the stage when they are having a very serious relationship with their peer group. >>Correct They don't want to be out of the group. >>Correct So, they participate in what their peers are doing without thinking twice. >> Correct  In addition, when they face the situation which they should refuse to do, it is hard for them to say no. >>Correct Korean society should take this seriously and set plans to lead them to the right way since it can't just put the responsibility on thier parents. >> Korean society should take this problem seriously and set plans to lead them to the right way since they can't just pass all of the responsibility to their parents.  

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