Karen~ It's [이름] :)

2012-01-27 · 첨삭 강사 Karen

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Make a composition about your favorite movie. Try to explain what the story is about and why it is your favorite movie of all time! Have fun writing I am not a movie person so I am going to tell you about shows I am in love with right now. First of all Chuck from ABC is my favorite in that it combines two different genres. thriller and commedy. It has two different but important sets respectively and the characters in the show has different issues. The most interesting part is that Chuck, who connects both parties, is becoming a real spy. At first he was a total mess but as seasons progress, he becomes an awesome ninja and I love it. Also you have to make sure that the love-line between Chuck and Sara is so unsecure which makes it more interesting. Secondly How I Met Your Mother is also an attractive one. That is a story of how Ted, a main character of the show, met his fiance but still I cannot find even a clue. You have to know that it is going to be almost 8 season!@@

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Hello [이름]! First of all thanks for sending in a composition. This is your first composition, right? Hurray! (^__^) You're composition is really really interesting. I also like watching 'Chuck' (I think he is charming) and of course, 'How I met your mother', I think we have the same favorite character, we both like Barney! He is so adorable and funny! Haha. Anyway, if you have time, just send in more compositions and I will be very glad to read them. Talk to you later! ^^.

~t.Karen (>o<)

Make a composition about your favorite movie. Try to explain what the story is about and why it is your favorite movie of all time! Have fun writing

 

I am not a movie person so I am going to tell you about shows I am in love with right now.

>> Correct!

First of all Chuck from ABC is my favorite in that it combines two different genres. thriller and commedy.

>> First of all Chuck from ABC is my favorite for the reason that/ because it combines two different genres: thriller and commedy.

 It has two different but important sets respectively and the characters in the show has different issues.

>> It has two different but important sets respectively and the characters in the show have different issues.

The most interesting part is that Chuck, who connects both parties, is becoming a real spy.

>> Correct!

 At first he was a total mess but as seasons progress, he becomes an awesome ninja and I love it.

>> Correct!

Also you have to make sure that the love-line between Chuck and Sara is so unsecure which makes it more interesting.

>> Correct!

 Secondly How I Met Your Mother is also an attractive one.

>> Correct! Or

>> Secondly How I Met Your Mother is also an interesting one.

That is a story of how Ted, a main character of the show, met his fiance but still I cannot find even a clue.

>> That is a story of how Ted, the main character of the show, met his fiance but still I cannot find even one clue to guess who his fiance is.

You have to know that it is going to be almost 8 season!@@

>> You have to know that it is almost the 8th season!

 

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