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2012-07-16 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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Write a paragraph to answer this question. "Why do you think English needs to be learned? What is the importance of English to you?" Being able to speak English fluently provides us with chance to get a job better than being not in Korea. Most of big companies hire employees who can speak English well more than who cannot. For this reason, so many Korean people have tried to learn English since even the time when they fisrt began to walk. To me, Speaking English fluently is one of the my essential skills to achive because my dream is to be a English teacher. The reason why I want to be a English teacher is that only teaching English is able to improve student's thinking deeply and widely in that they live in the social community by giving them indirect experience of the global cultures. Therefore, English which I must achieve is the most important to me. 7/16 topic is "The arguments of the supervised night self-study"

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Awesome! You\'ve no idea on how deeply impressed I was with your performance in class. I am confident that there is something more to you than meets the eye. Thanks for sending in this composition. Have a splendid day! T. Chloe Write a paragraph to answer this question. \"Why do you think English needs to be learned? What is the importance of English to you?\" >> correctBeing able to speak English fluently provides us with chance to get a job better than being not in Korea. >> Being able to speak English fluently provides us with a chance to get a better job in Korea. Most of big companies hire employees who can speak English well more than who cannot. >> Most big companies hire employees who can speak English well more than those who can not. For this reason, so many Korean people have tried to learn English since even the time when they fisrt began to walk. >> Because of this reason, many Korean people have tried to learn English even from the time they started to learn how to walk.To me, Speaking English fluently is one of the my essential skills to achive because my dream is to be a English teacher. >> For me, speaking English fluently is one of the essential skills that I need to achive because my dream is to be an English teacher some day. The reason why I want to be a English teacher is that only teaching English is able to improve student\'s thinking deeply and widely in that they live in the social community by giving them indirect experience of the global cultures. >> The reason why I want to be an English teacher is beacuse teaching English will be able to improve student\'s deep and wide thinking for living in the social community by giving them indirect experience of the global cultures. Therefore, English which I must achieve is the most important to me.>> Therefore, achieving English is the most important for me.7/16 topic is \"The arguments of the supervised night self-study\" >>The topic for July 16 is \"The arguments on supervised night self-study.\".

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