Keeping A Diary
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I like keeping a diary.
However, it is a bothersome work.
I usually keep a diary in the evening, but you know students have too much homework.
Thus, I am really exhausted when I finish all my work.
I am tired and busy, so it is to hard thing for me.
I want to write my whole day and my dream in the diary.
Someone said that we see and talk a lot about our dream, it will come true.
Therefore, I want to write my dream in my diary.
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I like keeping a diary.
>> Correct
However, it is a bothersome work.
However, it is a bothersome work.
>> However, it is bothersome work.
I usually keep a diary in the evening, but you know students have too much homework.
I usually keep a diary in the evening, but you know students have too much homework.
>> I usually write in my diary in the evening, but you know students have too much homework.
Thus, I am really exhausted when I finish all my work.
Thus, I am really exhausted when I finish all my work.
>> Correct
I am tired and busy, so it is to hard thing for me.
I am tired and busy, so it is to hard thing for me.
>> I am tired and busy, so it is a really hard thing for me.
I want to write my whole day and my dream in the diary.
I want to write my whole day and my dream in the diary.
>> I want to write about my whole day and my dream in my diary.
Someone said that we see and talk a lot about our dream, it will come true.
Someone said that we see and talk a lot about our dream, it will come true.
>> Someone said that if we see and talk a lot about our dream, it would come true.
Therefore, I want to write my dream in my diary.
Therefore, I want to write my dream in my diary.
>> Therefore, I want to write about my dream in my diary.
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