Keeping pets is good for children?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, having pets is good for children. First, playing with their pets, children develop and improve their empathy ability. Second, they build a responsibility when taking care of their pets. Lastly being with pets gives children an emotional sense of stability.
I have a dog. She is not a pet but a member of my family. Being with her my family are always happy ~
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [Name] [이름]! Thanks for doing your homework. I actually don\'t have any pets and children as well. I live in a detached house and there are a lot of pets in my neighborhood. So, I don\'t think I need one. ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
In my opinion, having pets is good for children.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
First, by playing with their pets, children develop and improve their empathy ability.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
Second, they build a responsibility when taking care of their pets.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
OR>>> Second, they build a sense of responsibility when taking care of their pets.
Lastly being with pets gives children an emotional sense of stability.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
I have a dog.
I have a dog.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
She is not a pet but a member of my family.
>>> CORRECT!~^^
Being with her, my family are always happy ~
>>> CORRECT!~^^
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.