Kindly answer this question in essay form. What are the things you expect for this new year?
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For one thing, I want to increase sales of my business. Secondly I want to write a novel for a writing test of end of June of this year. Third, I want to read classic English or Russian novels a lot(I like Tolstoy or Jane Austen or Maugham) and classics of psychology(Jung or Preud)
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Hi, [이름] [이름]!
T[이름]k you for submitting your answer.
I wish that you would be able to achieve your goals for this year.
I think that these are awesome goals to achieve. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> For one thing, I want to increase the sales of my business.
>> Or: Firstly, I want a sales increase on my business.
Secondly I want to write a novel for a writing test of end of June of this year.
>> Secondly I want to write a novel for a writing test at the end of June of this year.
Third, I want to read classic English or Russian novels a lot(I like Tolstoy or Jane Austen or Maugham) and classics of psychology(Jung or Preud)
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Thirdly, I want to read classic English or Russian novels a lot(I like Tolstoy or Jane Austen or Maugham) and classics of psychology(Jung or Freud)
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