Kindly explain your family in your own words. Make at least 6 or more sentences.

2021-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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My dad is sometimes angry at something but he is very benevolent. He thought me how to look something with a lot of perspectives. My mom is really kind and she always smile to us. So I think it is really comfortable to me to talk with my mom. My brother is sometimes annoying but he is one of my good friends. I can talk with him freely because I can treat him like my friends. And I think I am mood maker. I can make my house mood great or bad (bad is when I am mad at something or sad).

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:)

You play such an important role in your family. You have a wonderful family by the way. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My dad is sometimes angry at something but he is very benevolent.
>> CORRECT

He thought me how to look something with a lot of perspectives.
>> He taught me to look at something in different perspectives. 

My mom is really kind and she always smile to us.
>> My mom is really kind and she always smiles at us. 

So I think it is really comfortable to me to talk with my mom.
>> I feel more comfortable when I talk with my mom. 

My brother is sometimes annoying but he is one of my good friends.
>> My brother is sometimes annoying but he is one of my good friends. 

I can talk with him freely because I can treat him like my friends.
>>I can talk with him freely because I can treat him like my friend. 

And I think I am mood maker.
>> I think I am a mood maker. 

I can make my house mood great or bad (bad is when I am mad at something or sad)
>> I can make the mood of the house good or bad. It gets bad when I am in a bad mood.)

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