Korea Children\'s Day
학생이 쓴 원문
As you know, Korean parents, especially mothers, love their children too much.
So on Children\'s Day parents give their kids big and expensive gifts, provide special places to them such as amusement parks, eat out and eat various and delicious food with them.
For me, these are an uncomfortable fact.
Therefore, I think Korea Children\'s Day is a day when parents serve their children.
That day is not an important day but very tired and uncomfortable day for parents.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] Ha!
I hope you have a good time during the holiday.
Take a rest and have fun.
I\'ll see you when you get back.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
As you know, Korean parents, especially mothers, love their children too much.
>> As you know, Korean parents, especially mothers, love their children so much.
So on Children\'s Day parents give their kids big and expensive gifts, provide special places to them such as amusement parks, eat out and eat various and delicious food with them.
So on Children\'s Day parents give their kids big and expensive gifts, provide special places to them such as amusement parks, eat out and eat various and delicious food with them.
>> So on Children\'s Day, parents give their kids big and expensive gifts, take them to special places such as amusement parks, and eat various delicious food with them.
For me, these are an uncomfortable fact.
For me, these are an uncomfortable fact.
>> For me, these are uncomfortable facts.
Therefore, I think Korea Children\'s Day is a day when parents serve their children.
Therefore, I think Korea Children\'s Day is a day when parents serve their children.
>> Therefore, I think Korean Children\'s Day is a day when parents serve their children.
That day is not an important day but very tired and uncomfortable day for parents.
That day is not an important day but very tired and uncomfortable day for parents.
>> That day is not an important day but a very tiring and uncomfortable day for parents.
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