Korea is an aging society. How is this affecting the country negatively?
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We might be faced with many various problems as an aging society. The number of younger generation and middle aged worker have decreased more and more. A vitality of society will lose. Our children will be burden amount of taxes.
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Thank you for this Ms. [Name]! For a country like South Korea which relies so much on human and labor resource, an aging society is a big concern.
We might be faced with many various problems as an aging society.
>>> correct
The number of younger generation and middle aged worker have decreased more and more.
>>> OR: The number of younger generation and middle aged workers have decreased constantly.
A vitality of society will lose.
>>> The vitality of the society will be lost.
Our children will be burden amount of taxes.
>>> Our children will be burdened by the big amount of taxes.
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