Korea\'s low birth rate.
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Dear [Name], I will talk about low birth rate of Korea continuously. As I said, Korea women has a high level education in the world. so they have a economic ability now, so they can live alone without support. old time, women could not get a job that they get a lot of money. so they have to depend on their husband. so they married when they are young. so they can get a child with easy and a lot of child. in my case, I had a 2 elder brothers and sister. but I had only one son. my elder brother also had one son too. so population is getting decrease.
These days, young people don\'t want to marry. so it is very serious situation. in the future, Korea will be replace foreign people.
T. Don, if you have a chance to go immigration another country, please come to Korea.
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T. DON
Dear [Name], I will talk about low birth rate of Korea continuously.
>> CORRECT
As I
said, Korea women has a high level education in the world. so they have a
economic ability now, so they can live alone without support.
>> As I
said, Korean women has a high level education in the world so they can be financially stable now and they can live alone without support.
Old time,
women could not get a job that they get a lot of money. so they have to
depend on their husband. so they married when they are young. so they
can get a child with easy and a lot of child.
>> In the old times,
women could not get a job with a good salary and so they have to
depend on their husband. They get married when they were young so they
can get a child with ease and have a lot of children.
in my case, I had a 2
elder brothers and sister. but I had only one son. my elder brother also
had one son too. so population is getting decrease.
>> In my case, I had a 2
elder brothers and a sister and I had only one son. My elder brother also
had one son too. The population is decreasing.
These days, young people don\'t want to marry. so it is very serious
situation. in the future, Korea will be replace foreign people.
>> These days, young people don\'t want to get married and it is a very serious
situation. In the future, Korea will be replaced by foreign people.
T. Don, if you have a chance to go immigration another country, please come to Korea.
>> T. Don, if you have a chance to go to another country, please consider and come to Korea.
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