korean academy

2011-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Joan

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, I had a korea academy class at 7:00~10:00. I learned about korean literature. It was about korea's history and criticism against the people who had betrayed korea. Also, it was about the war between korea and other countries. The author had written about their hard life because of wars. For example, one kid had lost his leg because of the grenade and his father had lost his arm because of a dynamite. War is really creepy~ -_-

강사 첨삭

Kevin! ^^ Hello! War really makes things chaotic and ugly. Learning history is one of the magnificent things, we can travel through time through it. On your composition, be careful with your capitalization and article usage. Here are the things you need to study on: T' Joan   Today, I had a korea academy class at 7:00~10:00. >>Today, I had a korean academy class at 7:00~10:00.I learned about korean literature. >>I learned about Korean Literature. It was about korea's history and criticism against the people who had betrayed korea. >>It was about Korea's history and the criticism against the people who had betrayed Korea. Also, it was about the war between korea and other countries. >> It was also about the war between Korea and other countries. The author had written about their hard life because of wars. >>CORRECT!For example, one kid had lost his leg because of the grenade and his father had lost his arm because of a dynamite. >>CORRECT! War is really creepy~ >>CORRECT!

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