Korean customs that I'd like foreigners to adopt
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In Korean society, there are some traditional customs which have been more than centry ago. First of all, we have respected elderly people. As influence of the Confucian culture, we still have keep some manners to be polit to eldery. For exemple, when the eldery people take a bus or subway but if there aren't seats available, most of koreans will give up their seats for them. Secondly, among the neighbors, especially in rural areas, they help out on each other's farms. we called this exchange of labor as "pum-a-si". This is really good custom because they can help each other and also share a attachment among the people. Nowadays, more and more, people are busy and ignore each others so whole human society is getting dry. I think this korean style warm customs can be a way of solution for this cynical society.
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In Korean society, there are some traditional customs which have been more than centry ago.
>>In Korean society, there are some traditional customs which have been there more than a century ago.
First of all, we have respected elderly people.
>>First of all, we respect elderly people. As influence of the Confucian culture, we still have keep some manners to be polit to eldery.
>>As an influence of Confucian culture, we still have to keep some manners to be polite towards eldery.
For exemple, when the eldery people take a bus or subway but if there aren\'t seats available, most of koreans will give up their seats for them.
>>For example, when eldery people take a bus or subway and there are no seats available, most Koreans will give their seats to them.
Secondly, among the neighbors, especially in rural areas, they help out on each other\'s farms.
>>Secondly, among neighbors, especially in rural areas, they help out on each other\'s farms.
we called this exchange of labor as \"pum-a-si\".
>>We called this exchange of labor as \"pum-a-si\".
This is really good custom because they can help each other and also share a attachment among the people.
>>This is a really good custom because they can help each other and also share an attachment among the people. Nowadays, more and more, people are busy and ignore each others so whole human society is getting dry.
>>Nowadays, more and more, people are getting busier and ignore each other so the whole human society is getting dry.
I think this korean style warm customs can be a way of solution for this cynical society.
>>I think this Korean style warm custom can be a solution to this cynical society.
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