korean divination
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi june
I'll talk about korean divination.
Roughly two kinds of fortune-teller in korea, one is a person to study divination we call it yeok-sul-ga, the other is a possessed shaman we call it mu-dang.
If you want to ask your future to yeok-sul-ga, you have to say your birth time,date,year to them. That's sa-ju. Some korean believe that sa-ju affect a personal life. To put it simply, If you was born in good time for sa-ju, your life is happier than born in bad time person. You are going to enter good school easier, to get married with better person than to birth bad sa-ju person.
I don't know exactly that's true or false. But most important thing is if you got a bad sa-ju, you exert yourself as hard as possible. So you'll be changed your life.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
I'm so sorry but I don't agree with fortune telling. Personally, I do not want to depend my fate on physical signs. I believe in my heart that God has plans and purposes for each of our lives and that He always has the best in store for us. This goes hand in hand with believing that we should not let divination guide our decisions or life choices.
I am more comfortable and joyful knowing that my birth date, time, and year are all part of God's perfect plan for me. I hope that you feel the same too. ^^
~June
Hi june
>> Correct
>> Hi June! (Better)
I'll talk about korean divination.
>> Correct
>> I'll talk about Korean divination.
Roughly two kinds of fortune-teller in korea, one is a person to study divination we call it yeok-sul-ga, the other is a possessed shaman we call it mu-dang.
>> Generally, there are two kinds of fortune tellers in Korea. One, who we call yeok-sul-ga, is a person who studies divination, and the other, called mu-dang, is a possessed shaman.
If you want to ask your future to yeok-sul-ga, you have to say your birth time,date,year to them.
>> If you want to ask your future from a yeok-sul-ga, you have to say your birth time, date, and year.
That's sa-ju. Some korean believe that sa-ju affect a personal life.
>> That's sa-ju. Some Koreans believe that sa-ju affects one’s personal life.
To put it simply, If you were born in good time for sa-ju, your life is happier than being born in bad time person.
>> To put it simply, if you were born in a good time for sa-ju, your life is happier than if you were born in a bad time.
You are going to enter good school easier, to get married with better person than to birth bad sa-ju person.
>> For example, compared to a person with bad sa-ju, you can enter a good school easier or get married to a better person.
I don't know exactly that's true or false. But most important thing is if you got a bad sa-ju, you exert yourself as hard as possible. So you'll be changed your life.
>> I don't know exactly if that's true, but the most important thing is that if you have bad sa-ju, you exert yourself as hard as possible, so your life will be changed.
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