Korean drinking culture. Don't click if you under 19.

2012-07-23 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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Write a composition about Korean's drinking alcohol culture. In Korean society, the person who can drink a lot or enjoy a drinking party even if can not drink well, is admired by every people. It's because of Korean drinking culture. If you come to Korea, you can easily find lots of pubs and bars nearby subway stations, companies, and especially colleges. If you enter one of them, you can hear so many songs which are not kind of pops but like a cheering songs of the baseball or soccer. In the period the songs finished, you can also find one or all of the members drinking, and then starting another song like a chant with actions as possible as soon. Yes, that's the really exciting alcohol game whether or not someone dies. However this culture is relevant to people under middle of 20s. The others upper them have small, bussiness talk, or do more crazy games. Anyways, it is certain that the reason having the drinking party is for the better relationship.

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Hi [이름]! It sounds like you like to drink! haha..Thank you for answering your homework. I know you did your best. You did a superb job in expressing your ideas. It sounds like you enjoy being in the pub with your friends! Don\'t drink too much, though. So, do you like to chant with actions when you are drunk? hahaha..Tell me more about it in class later. Take care! -----T Chloe------   In Korean society, the person who can drink a lot or enjoy a drinking party even if can not drink well, is admired by every people. >>>In Korean society, a person who can drink a lot or enjoy drinking parties even if he or she can not drink well, is admired by people. It\'s because of Korean drinking culture. >>>This is because it is a part of Korea\'s drinking culture. >>>It is because this is a part of Korea\'s drinking culture. If you come to Korea, you can easily find lots of pubs and bars nearby subway stations, companies, and especially colleges. >>>If you come to Korea, you can easily find lots of pubs and bars near the  subway stations, companies, and especially college institutions. >>>When you come to Korea,  you can easily find lots of pubs and bars near the  subway stations, companies, and especially college institutions.  If you enter one of them, you can hear so many songs which are not kind of pops but more like cheering songs for the baseball or soccer. >>> If you enter one of them, you can hear so many songs which are not pop music but more like cheering songs for a baseball or soccer game. >>>When you enter one of them, you will hear so many songs that are not pop music but more like cheering songs for a baseball or soccer game.  In the period the songs finished, you can also find one or all of the members drinking, and then starting another song like a chant with actions as possible as soon. >>>As soon as these songs are finished,another song starts to be sung like a chant with actions , you will also find one or all of the members drinking. Yes, that\'s the really exciting alcohol game whether or not someone dies. >>>Yes, that\'s how exciting these alcohol games are. However this culture is relevant to people under middle of 20s. >>>However this culture is relevant for people who are in their mid 20\'s or younger. >>>However this Korean culture is true for people who are in their mid 20\'s or younger.  The others upper them have small, bussiness talk, or do more crazy games. >>>The older aged people have small business talks or do more crazy games.  Anyways, it is certain that the reason having the drinking party is for the better relationship. >>> Anyway, it is certain that the reason people have these drinking parties is to build better relationship between each other.

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