Lady Bugs.
학생이 쓴 원문
You don't care about bugs.
Do you?! Okay.
If you care about bugs, why?
Why do you care about bugs?
If you can't answer my question, then let me tell you a story about a lady bug.
Once upoun a time there was a bug kingdom ruled by ants.
The ants were not fair.
They ate all the honey from the bees.
And that wasen't enought for the ants, that they ate all the nacture from the flowers.
So the bees became very mad. But the ants is there king, so they couldnt complain to the ants.
And that why the bees went to there qeen.
When they went to the qeen, they all talked about what happened.
When the qeen heard al about the mean ants she became very angry.
So she went lab, and made a strong bug called Lady bug.
When the lady bug were finished, she sent a lady bug to the ants kigdom and told th lady bug to distroy the ant qeen and the ant king.
So the lady bug did it's job.
And the bugs land became peace.
THE END
BYE~~~~~ BYE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Ji[이름]! What another fascinating story! Did you make this yourself? Good job!
Please check the spelling of some words here. Don\'t get confused with the words they\'re, there and their.
Take note of the difference between it\'s and its.
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
You don\'t care about bugs.
>> CORRECT! Do you?! Okay.
>> CORRECT! If you care about bugs, why?
>> CORRECT! Why do you care about bugs?
>> CORRECT! If you can\'t answer my question, then let me tell you a story about a lady bug.
>> CORRECT! Once upoun a time there was a bug kingdom ruled by ants.
>> CORRECT!
>> uponThe ants were not fair.
>> CORRECT!They ate all the honey from the bees. >> CORRECT!
And that wasen\'t enought for the ants, that they ate all the nacture from the flowers.
>> And that wasn\'t enough for them, they also ate all the nectar from the flowers.So the bees became very mad.
>> CORRECT!
But the ants is there king, so they couldnt complain to the ants.>> But the ants have a king, so they couldn\'t complain about the ants.
And that why the bees went to there qeen. >> That\'s why the bees went to their queen.
When they went to the qeen, they all talked about what happened. >> CORRECT!
>> queen
When the qeen heard al about the mean ants she became very angry. >> When the queen heard all about the mean ants, she became very angry.
So she went lab, and made a strong bug called Lady bug.
>> She then went to the lab and she made a strong bug called \"lady bug\".
When the lady bug were finished, she sent a lady bug to the ants kigdom and told th lady bug to distroy the ant qeen and the ant king. >> After making the lady bug, she sent it to the ants\' kingdom and told it to destroy the ants\' queen and king.
So the lady bug did it\'s job.
>> So the lady bug did its job.And the bugs land became peace.
>> And then the bugs\' land became peaceful.
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