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In conclusion, Korean society is getting fatter than before. There are some obvious reasons such as too much work-load and the price of healthy food. In order to deal with Koreans’ increasing rate of obesity, we need to change our eating habits not into westernized method, but into our traditional method, which can provide Koreans with home-made food or organic local food. you don't need to write my whole sentences. it's kide of nuisance, i guess. give me just breif comment with incorrect sentences. that is more effective, saving your time.. and have a nice day.. Dorna!!!!

Hello! Thank you for your suggestion! I wish I could do that but it is the company’s  policy to correct all the sentences so that you can compare it and see the corrections.  Anyway, have a lovely day!   ---Donna--- In conclusion, Korean society is getting fatter than before. >> In conclusion, the Korean society is getting fatter than before. There are some obvious reasons such as too much work-load and the price of healthy food. >> There are some obvious reasons such as too much work-load  that interferes with proper eating time and the high price of healthy food. In order to deal with Koreans’ increasing rate of obesity, we need to change our eating habits not into westernized method, but into our traditional method, which can provide Koreans with home-made food or organic local food. >>  To  deal with the Koreans’ increasing rate of obesity, we need to change our eating habits,  not to immitate the  western method  but to practice our traditional method which is to provide Koreans with home-made food or organic local food. you don't need to write my whole sentences. >> You don't need to rewrite all the  sentences.  it's kide of nuisance, i guess. >> It’s kind of a nuisance, I guess.  give me just breif comment with incorrect sentences. >>Just give me a brief comment with the incorrect sentences.that is more effective, saving your time..>> That is more effective and saves your time.and have a nice day.. Dorna!!!! >> Have a nice day, Dorna!   P.S. Thanks for thinking of my convenience, Ms. [이름]ny. However, I think it is but fare that I give your corrections carefully and completely. So, I will see you in the next draft!