Late Homework!!

2014-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY:Is strong moral character the most important qualification for a leader? I don't think strong moral character is the most important qualification for a leader. And I don't think there is a qualification which is more important than others. I searched through the Internet what qualifications the leader should have. There are so many of it so let me write just a few. The leader must set his/her goal clearly, look after her workers and do not afraid of failure. However I think our society would be less corrupted thanks to the leader who has strong moral character. And if he keeps on his character, people will notice it and his company would be successful someday,

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There it is, [이름]! I am so glad to see this one~ Anyways, take care of yourself especially I can see to it that you are extremely under stress nowadays. Please take time to review articles. As you know, we have the definite and the indefinite ones. Moreover, I changed the transition device \"however\" into \"from this respect\". I think there was no shift of ideas so I did it. Thanks and see you on Monday! ESSAY:Is strong moral character the most important qualification for a leader?I don\'t think strong moral character is the most important qualification for a leader. >>CORRECT!  And I don\'t think there is a qualification which is more important than others. >>CORRECT!I searched through the Internet what qualifications the leader should have. >>I searched through the Internet what qualifications a leader should have. There are so many of it so let me write just a few. >>There are so many of them so let me write just a few. The leader must set his/her goal clearly, look after her workers and do not afraid of failure. >>A leader must set his goal clearly, look after his workers and is not afraid of failure. However I think our society would be less corrupted thanks to the leader who has strong moral character. >>From this respect, I think our society would be less corrupted thanks to the leader who has strong moral character. And if he keeps on his character, people will notice it and his company would be successful someday. >>And if he keeps on holding on to his character, people will notice it and his company would be successful someday.

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