laundry machine

2010-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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On Monday morning suddenly my laundry machine stopped, so I called the Samsung service center to ask repair it. The office promised to send a mechanic on Thursday. It was too far to wait but there’s no other way. I had to draw out all the soaked heavy clothes from the machine and washed socks and underwear, leaving the others in the bucket, because I didn’t have enough energy to wash all of them. After checking every part of it, the repair man told us that every part he checked was too being impaired to fix. We should need to replace it with new one. So we went to the electronic appliance shop to buy a new one and use it right away. the new laundry machine will be delivered by tomorrow morning. “An old soldier will only disappear…!”

강사 첨삭

Hi Ms. [Name]!! Happy Friday!!! I really liked the last sentence that you included here in your composition. I always learn from you. Thank you. Yes, sometimes even if we don't like to replace our old things, we don't have a choice but to change it for our convenience. Well, I hope that you will be having an easy time using your new washing machine. Don't tire yourself too much, it is not good for your health. Have a great weekend Ms. [Name] and I'll see you again on Monday. Lei J On Monday morning suddenly my laundry machine stopped working, so I called the Samsung service center to have it repaired.  >>correct The office promised to send a mechanic on Thursday.  >>correct It was too far to wait but there’s no other way.  >>It's a long wait wait but there’s no other way to fix it. I had to draw out all the soaked heavy clothes from the machine and washed socks and underwear,  >>correct leaving the others in the bucket, because I didn’t have enough energy to wash all of them.  >>correct After checking every part of it, the repair man told us that every part he checked was too being impaired to fix.  >>correct We should need to replace it with new one.  >>We need to replace it with new one.  So we went to the electronic appliance shop to buy a new one and use it right away.  >>correct the new laundry machine will be delivered by tomorrow morning. “ >>correct An old soldier will only disappear…!” >>correct

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