leaders
학생이 쓴 원문
It is very sad that Korea\'s gender equality clock have turned back.
But that is fact. In the past, many women\'s or feminism groups request strongly a female quota system to be women leader.
After Park Geum Hye\'s failure, this requests lost trust of people and justification.
Many women leaders have family connections especially father\'s heroic surname.
So of course they become failure.
They could not develop as independent politicans owing to too much wonderful vested rights.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Ms. [Name]!
That’s why many politicians are strongly determined to run for certain positions -they already have political connections through their families. The family name alone is often enough to attract voters’ attention. Sadly, in the Philippines, this practice has become common among many families, eventually leading to political dynasties. I hope Korea won’t develop this kind of system
Aki~
It is very sad that Korea\'s gender equality clock have turned back.
>>> It is very sad that Korea\'s gender equality clock has turned back.
But that is fact. In the past, many women\'s or feminism groups request strongly a female quota system to be women leader.
>>> But that is a fact. In the past, many women\'s or feminist groups strongly requested to have a female quota system to have women leaders.
After Park Geum Hye\'s failure, this requests lost trust of people and justification.
>>>After Park Geum Hye\'s failure, this request lost the trust of the people and justification.
Many women leaders have family connections especially father\'s heroic surname.
>>> Many women leaders have family connections, especially their father\'s heroic surname.
So of course they become failure.
>>> So of course, they become failures.
They could not develop as independent politicans owing to too much wonderful vested rights.
>>> They could not develop as independent politicians owing to too many wonderful vested right
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