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2010-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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i was very excited to enjoy my first swimming. actually, just like i told you, i am a beer bottle. in Korea, we called beer bottle to someone who cannot swim and also sink whenever try to swim. i think the reason of i cannot swim is i am afraid of the water. to speak honestly, i am afraid of drink the water and fall into the water. i should overcome my fear to the water. i am going to learn how to swim. for that reason, i used tube which help me to float. and my friend help me to move on the sea. ^ ^ there were many people who wanted to avoid hot and enjoy the swim. my friend and i also took a banana boat. it was very exciting and cool.

강사 첨삭

I was very excited to enjoy my first swimming. >>I was very excited to go swimming for the first time. actually, just like i told you, i am a beer bottle.  >>correct in Korea, we term beer bottle someone who cannot swim and also sink whenever he/she tries to swim.>>correct i think the reason of i cannot swim is i am afraid of the water. >>I think the reason why I can't swim is because I am afraid of the water. to speak honestly, i am afraid of drink the water and fall into the water. >>honestly speaking, I am afraid that I will drink the sea water and drown into the water. i should overcome my fear of the water.  >>correct i am going to learn how to swim.>>correct for that reason, i used tube which help me to float.  >>for that reason, I used a tube/floater. and my friend helped me to further move on the sea. ^ ^>>correct there were many people who wanted to avoid hot and enjoy the swim. >>there were many people who wanted to avoid hot weather and enjoy swimming. my friend and i also took a banana boat.  >>my friend and I also rode a banana boat. it was very exciting and cool. >>correct

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