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i was very excited to enjoy my first swimming.
actually, just like i told you, i am a beer bottle. in Korea, we called beer bottle to someone who cannot swim and also sink whenever try to swim.
i think the reason of i cannot swim is i am afraid of the water.
to speak honestly, i am afraid of drink the water and fall into the water.
i should overcome my fear to the water. i am going to learn how to swim.
for that reason, i used tube which help me to float. and my friend help me to move on the sea. ^ ^
there were many people who wanted to avoid hot and enjoy the swim.
my friend and i also took a banana boat. it was very exciting and cool.
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I was very excited to enjoy my first swimming. >>I was very excited to go swimming for the first time.
actually, just like i told you, i am a beer bottle.
>>correct
in Korea, we term beer bottle someone who cannot swim and also sink whenever he/she tries to swim.>>correct
i think the reason of i cannot swim is i am afraid of the water. >>I think the reason why I can't swim is because I am afraid of the water.
to speak honestly, i am afraid of drink the water and fall into the water. >>honestly speaking, I am afraid that I will drink the sea water and drown into the water.
i should overcome my fear of the water.
>>correct
i am going to learn how to swim.>>correct
for that reason, i used tube which help me to float.
>>for that reason, I used a tube/floater.
and my friend helped me to further move on the sea. ^ ^>>correct
there were many people who wanted to avoid hot and enjoy the swim. >>there were many people who wanted to avoid hot weather and enjoy swimming.
my friend and i also took a banana boat.
>>my friend and I also rode a banana boat.
it was very exciting and cool.
>>correct
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