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2010-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 lei

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning lei. How are you? Long time no hear your voice. I miss you. During the past time, Many things were changed. Our last class was 17,Aug,2010. Time flies very quickly. During the time, I changed my position. I was a secretary of our yard general manager. When I was at the position, I studied English with you. ^ ^ I wanted to change my position for growing my capability. In Shipbuilding company, there is a team which title is Contract Administration. The team has function to control between ship owner and shipyard. I wanted to join the team. but I don't have proper competence. Our company wants to member of the team that is Fluent English, graduaated from university(It means the guy should have a degree.), score of Toeic( more than 700).

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!!! How are you?!?! I missed you so much..I am really excited to talk to you..See you later.

Lei J

 

Good morning lei.
>>correct

How are you?
>>correct

Long time no hear your voice.

>>It's been a long time that I haven't heard your voice.

I miss you.
>>correct

During the past time, Many things were changed.
>>Many things have changed.

Our last class was 17,Aug,2010. 
>>correct

Time flies very quickly.
>>correct

During the time, I changed my position.
>>During that time, I had another position.

I was the secretary of our yard general manager.

>>correct

When I was at that position, I studied English with you. ^ ^
>>correct

I wanted to change my position for growing my capability.

>>I wanted to change my position to improve my capability.

In Shipbuilding company, there is a team which title is Contract Administration.

>>In a ship bouilding company, there was this team which is titled as Contract Administration.

The team has function to control between ship owner and shipyard.

>>The teams functions to have a control between the ship owner and the shipyard.

I wanted to join that team.

>>correct

but I don't have proper competence.

>>correct

Our company wants to member of the team that is Fluent English, graduaated from university(It means the guy should have a degree.),

>>Our company wants to have a member who is fluent in English and a university graduate.

score of Toeic( more than 700).

>>also they want the person to have a TOEIC score of 700.

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