lesson 5 Closest Friend
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lesson 5 Closest Friend
I had a chance to see my neighbors in company because they lived in the dormitory with me. One day, One of them who is Minjae-kim and I were playing badminton in dormitory. He is twenty-nine years old. As for his looks, He has brown and straight hair. He is taller than me. We actually share very similar interests that is doing outside activity and playing computer game. He is enthusiastic about getting to know the area, so we talked about local shops and other amenities. It is very happy for me to spend such time together in order to get rid of stress. Overall, I think I’m lucky to have neighbors not only coworker but also friend.
강사 첨삭
As usual Sir [이름], you had the complete parts and a very good ending with your essay. I hope that you will follow this all the time. So here, you committed minute mistakes so study them carefully and try to memorise and not repeat the same mistakes specially in oral speech. See you next week!
-T. Donna
I had a chance to see my neighbors in company because they lived in the dormitory with me.
>> I had a chance to see my neighbors in the company because they live in the dormitory with me.
One day, One of them who is Minjae-kim and I were playing badminton in dormitory.
He is twenty-nine years old.
>> One day, one of them who is Min Jae Kim and I were playing badminton in dormitory.
He is twenty-nine years old.
As for his looks, He has brown and straight hair. He is taller than me.
>> As for his looks, he has brown and straight hair and he is taller than me.
We actually share very similar interests that is doing outside activity and playing computer game.
>> We actually share very similar interests which is doing outdoor activities and playing computer games.
He is enthusiastic about getting to know the area, so we talked about local shops and other amenities.
>> He is enthusiastic about getting to know the area so we talk about local shops and other amenities.
It is very happy for me to spend such time together in order to get rid of stress.
>> It is a very good thing for me to spend such time together in order to get rid of stress.
Overall, I think I\'m lucky to have neighbors not only coworker but also friend.
>> Overall, I think I\'m lucky to have a neighbor who is not only my co-worker but also a friend.
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