Let me introduce myself
학생이 쓴 원문
I’ll take you through from my name. I’m [이름]gyeong Sung and 28. My family consists of father, mother, me and my younger sister. I graduated from Naval Academy. So i have worked as soldier for about 8 years. There were a lot of hard things in works. But i believe exercising hard things finally makes me be stronger. When i have a trouble in works, i usually try to seek the solutions in the book. In the book, there are something we didn’t know. So if you have a problem in works or life, i recommend you reading a book.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Mark! Thank you for sending me your self introduction. We will practice more in class how to deliver your introduction well. I will see you then. Take care!~ T. Lyn
I’ll take you through from my name.
>>Correct. I will start by introducing myself.
I’m [이름]gyeong Sung and 28.
>>My name is [이름]gyeing Sung and my English name is Mark. I\'m 28 years old.
My family consists of father, mother, me and my younger sister.
>>Correct. I have four members in my family, my father, mother, younger sister, and I.
I graduated from Naval Academy.
>>Correct.
So i have worked as soldier for about 8 years.
>>So I have worked as a soldier for about 8 years.
There were a lot of hard things in works.
>>My work is challenging because there are so many tasks to do.
But i believe exercising hard things finally makes me be stronger.
>>But I believe that doing hard work in the end makes me stonger.
When i have a trouble in works, i usually try to seek the solutions in the book.
>>When I have difficulties at work, I usually try to find solution by reading a book.
In the book, there are something we didn’t know.
>>There are many things unknown.
So if you have a problem in works or life, i recommend you reading a book.
>>So, if you have problems about work or life, I recommend reading the book.
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