Let me Introduce myself .
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello! It was Nice to talking with you^^.
My majored in department of Forestry.
I learned a lot in university but I remember the most while learned Land survey class time.
I didnt liked class it, however l learned teamwork , we were 5to 6 people are divided took a class and one person was writing three person was measuring person
One person was sized reading after every body checked out.
Now this help me working lifes.
Now. I got married over 20 years. I have one son husband and me.
Last month we\'ve been living together cousins they go back home.sometimes
I missing them.
5years before i went graduate school department of art therapy for my son.
But rather than helped me . I was able to
have a good middle age, the second puberty.
And i was volunteer dementia care center.
for 1year. I felt very rewarded .and i thought my mom when she getting died she does\'nt good memory.
Too long? Next
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
I am so happy to see this lengthy but meaningful composition. You have great ideas and wonderful writing skills.
Always write down your thoughts about our discussions or questions whenever you can and I will be very glad to assist you.
Here below are some of my suggestions for you to think about. See you in class! =)
Hello! It was Nice to talking with you^^.
Correct! Or: Hello, it was nice talking to you.
My majored in department of Forestry.
>> I majored in Forestry.
I learned a lot in university but I remember the most while learned Land survey class time.
>> I learned a lot in the university and I remember the most what I learned Land Survey during class time.
I didnt liked class it, however l learned teamwork , we were 5to 6 people are divided took a class and one person was writing three person was measuring person
One person was sized reading after every body checked out.
>> I didn\'t liked class however, l learned teamwork . We were 5 to 6 people in a group taking the class and one person was writing while three persons were measuring.
One person was size reading after every body checked out.
Now this help me working lifes.
>> This helped me work for other\'s lives.
Now. I got married over 20 years. I have one son husband and me.
>> Now I\'m married for over 20 years. I have one son, my husband and me.
Last month we\'ve been living together cousins they go back home.sometimes
I missing them.
>> Last month we lived together with some cousins but they went back home. Sometimes
I miss them.
5years before i went graduate school department of art therapy for my son.
>> Five years ago, I went to the graduate school department of art therapy for my son.
But rather than helped me . I was able to
have a good middle age, the second puberty.
>> It helped me to be able to have a good middle age, my second puberty.
And i was volunteer dementia care center.
for 1year. I felt very rewarded .and i thought my mom when she getting died she does\'nt good memory.
Too long? Next
>> >> I became a volunteer at the dementia care center for 1year. I felt very rewarded. I thought of my mom when she was going to die if she wouldn\'t have a good memory.
Too long? Next
>> Correct!
I am so happy to see this lengthy but meaningful composition. You have great ideas and wonderful writing skills.
Always write down your thoughts about our discussions or questions whenever you can and I will be very glad to assist you.
Here below are some of my suggestions for you to think about. See you in class! =)
Hello! It was Nice to talking with you^^.
Correct! Or: Hello, it was nice talking to you.
My majored in department of Forestry.
>> I majored in Forestry.
I learned a lot in university but I remember the most while learned Land survey class time.
>> I learned a lot in the university and I remember the most what I learned Land Survey during class time.
I didnt liked class it, however l learned teamwork , we were 5to 6 people are divided took a class and one person was writing three person was measuring person
One person was sized reading after every body checked out.
>> I didn\'t liked class however, l learned teamwork . We were 5 to 6 people in a group taking the class and one person was writing while three persons were measuring.
One person was size reading after every body checked out.
Now this help me working lifes.
>> This helped me work for other\'s lives.
Now. I got married over 20 years. I have one son husband and me.
>> Now I\'m married for over 20 years. I have one son, my husband and me.
Last month we\'ve been living together cousins they go back home.sometimes
I missing them.
>> Last month we lived together with some cousins but they went back home. Sometimes
I miss them.
5years before i went graduate school department of art therapy for my son.
>> Five years ago, I went to the graduate school department of art therapy for my son.
But rather than helped me . I was able to
have a good middle age, the second puberty.
>> It helped me to be able to have a good middle age, my second puberty.
And i was volunteer dementia care center.
for 1year. I felt very rewarded .and i thought my mom when she getting died she does\'nt good memory.
Too long? Next
>> >> I became a volunteer at the dementia care center for 1year. I felt very rewarded. I thought of my mom when she was going to die if she wouldn\'t have a good memory.
Too long? Next
>> Correct!
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