Let me introduce the main attractions of my hometown.
학생이 쓴 원문
I was born in Jeju Island.
There are many famous places in Jeju Island.
Among them, I will introduce my two favorite places.
The first is Mt. Halla, the highest in South Korea. It is 1,950 meters tall and has beautiful scenery, including valleys and forests. So many tourists visiting Jeju Island try to climb Mt. Halla.
The second is Seongsan Ilchulbong in the east of Jeju Island. It is very beautiful because it combines a grand exterior with rocks and sea. This place is about 10 kilometers away from the village where I was born.
강사 첨삭
Hi, John! ^^
There are many famous places in Jeju Island.
Among them, I will introduce my two favorite places.
The first is Mt. Halla, the highest in South Korea.
The second is Seongsan Ilchulbong in the east of Jeju Island.
Thank you very much for sending this composition.
This is very well done!
I think your hometown is wonderful! :)
~t. Ally
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I was born in Jeju Island.
>> CORRECT!
There are many famous places in Jeju Island.
>> CORRECT!
Among them, I will introduce my two favorite places.
>> CORRECT!
The first is Mt. Halla, the highest in South Korea.
>> The first one is Mt. Halla, the highest mountain in South Korea.
It is 1,950 meters tall and has beautiful scenery, including valleys and forests.
>> It is 1,950 meters tall and has a beautiful scenery, including valleys and forests.
So many tourists visiting Jeju Island try to climb Mt. Halla.
>> CORRECT!
The second is Seongsan Ilchulbong in the east of Jeju Island.
>> The second is Seongsan Ilchulbong on the east of Jeju Island.
It is very beautiful because it combines a grand exterior with rocks and sea.
>> It is very beautiful because it combines a grand exterior with rocks and the sea.
This place is about 10 kilometers away from the village where I was born.
>> CORRECT!
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