life style

2013-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Giselle

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I think two kinds of lifestyles have advantages and disadvantages. But I prefer the latter style. Nowadays The World changes too rapidly. And sometimes changing fast gives person who adopts new thing bread and butter. That is why we follow new technology not lead. So we feel sick and tired easily. In addition, It is same to relationship. We meet and say good-bye easily. So in my opinion, keeping the same style is more better but not too much as a bull.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름], Happy Friday! It was fun reading your composition. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I look forward to reading more of your outputs. See you later! -- T. Giselle ---   I think two kinds of lifestyles have advantages and disadvantages.>> I think these two kinds of lifestyle have their advantages and disadvantages.But I prefer the latter style.>> Correct.Nowadays The World changes too rapidly. >> Correct.And sometimes changing fast gives person who adopts new thing bread and butter.>> And sometimes fast changes make people adopt to new things especially if they serve as their bread and butter.That is why we follow new technology not lead.>> That is why we follow new technology and not lead it.So we feel sick and tired easily. >> Correct.In addition, It is same to relationship.>> In addition, it works the same with relationships.We meet and say good-bye easily.>> Correct.So in my opinion, keeping the same style is more better but not too much as a bull. >> Correct.

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