life without cell phone
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If I don\'t have cell phone in all my life, I think it\'ll be very tired. In this age, phone is a vital thing. In my age, I don\'t have to have phone, however when I\'m university student, I have to have phone. Because, I have to submit with my phone. And, when I have a job, I have to work with my phone for example like COVID-19 I have to work in home so I have to have something can communicate none-face to face. Also, there\'ll be lots of uncomfortable things if I don\'t have phone.
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If I don\'t have cell phone in all my life, I think it\'ll be very tired.
> If I didn\'t have a cell phone all my life, I think I would be very tired.
In this age, phone is a vital thing.
>> In this day and age, a phone is a vital thing.
In my age, I don\'t have to have phone, however when I\'m university student, I have to have phone.
>> Now, I don\'t have to have a phone; however, when I become a university student, I have to have one.
Because, I have to submit with my phone.
>> It\'s because I have to submit school work with my phone.
And, when I have a job, I have to work with my phone for example like COVID-19 I have to work in home so I have to have something can communicate none-face to face.
>> When I get a job, I have to work with my phone. For example, when there\'s a pandemic like COVID19, I have to work from home so I have to have something that allows me to communicate with others virtually.
Also, there\'ll be lots of uncomfortable things if I don\'t have phone.
>> It would also be very inconvenient if I didn\'t have a phone.
Hi, Daniel! Thank you for answering your homework. You were able to make lengthy sentences. Great! However, be careful with sentence construction.
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