Life without weekend will be terrible
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People need relaxing times. After they work, they need free time and reward. In my opinion, weekend is one of the rewards. There are only a few holidays in a year. People need more reward times. I think weekends are them. In addition, weekends are regular. We can rest after 7 days that we work regularly. However, what if there are not weekends which are vital to people? Many people will be pressed by their works. I can cause cancer to people because of their stress. In conclusion, life without weekend will be terrible.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Hi, Daniel! The overall
content of your work is comprehensible. Great job!
- Teacher Debbie
>> This is a good sentence.
After they work, they need free time and reward.
>> After work, they need free time and rewards.
In my opinion, weekend is one of the rewards.
>> In my opinion, the weekend is one of the rewards.
There are only a few holidays in a year.
>> This is a good sentence.
People need more reward times.
>> Therefore, people need more free time.
I think weekends are them.
>> I think weekends are of them.
In addition, weekends are regular. We can rest after 7 days that we work regularly.
>> Since weekends are regular, we can rest after five days.
However, what if there are not weekends which are vital to people?
>> However, what if there weren\'t weekends which are vital to people?
Many people will be pressed by their works.
>> Many people would be swamped with work.
I can cause cancer to people because of their stress.
>> It could cause stress.
In conclusion, life without weekend will be terrible.
>> In conclusion, a life without the weekend would be terrible.
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