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I really hope to work at xxx. The reason why it is my dream and makes me passionate to business with foreign people. I always imagine to communicate with people in the other country. So, as you know well, I have had over one year of experience studying english in the Philippines in order to be a good international business man. In the Philippines where I learned a lot of thing which is a communication skill and new culture so that I can talk and share my idea with foreign people. So I'm ready to be a good business man and hard worker. If I have a chance to work in your company, I’m sure my character would make a valuable asset to your company. Although I've got many flaws and am not a perfect person, i want to show everyone how i work hard and do my best to develop xxx company.

Hi, you have a very good sentence construction. You deserve to work in the company you’ve been dreaming to work for because you have what it takes, very determined and hard working man…     I really hope to work at xxx. >correct!! The reason why it is my dream and makes me passionate to business with foreign people. >It is because; it is my dream and passion to have a business with foreign people.  I always imagine to communicate with people in the other country. >I always imagine communicating with people in other country. So, as you know well, I have had over one year of experience studying english in the Philippines in order to be a good international business man. >So, as you know well, I have almost a year of experience studying English in the Philippines in order to be a good international business man. In the Philippines where I learned a lot of thing which is a communication skill and new culture so that I can talk and share my idea with foreign people. >In the Philippines, I learned a lot of things that improves my communication skill and learned a new culture so that I can talk and share my ideas with foreign people. So I'm ready to be a good business man and hard worker. >correct!! If I have a chance to work in your company, I’m sure my character would make a valuable asset to your company. >correct!! Although I've got many flaws and am not a perfect person, i want to show everyone how i work hard and do my best to develop Xxx Company. >correct but capitalize letter “I”