Liquor

2010-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Bianca

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My favorite drink is beer. I would feel bad if the price of liquor doubled. I agree that it is time to make a change to the liquor consumption habits in Korea. When I visited in the USA, I saw many strong laws related in the liquor comsumption habit. They must not carry liquor in the car. Also they are checking ID when they sell liquor. There are so many problems because of liquor. In case, a drunken driver driving a car is very dangerous, but it happens frequantly. If I were to make a new law, pub could not open after 12 AM.

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My favorite drink is beer.I would feel bad if the price of liquor doubled. >> I would feel bad if the price of liqour will be doubled.I agree that it is time to make a change to the liquor consumption habits in Korea. >> I agree that it is time to make a change on the drinking habits of koreans. When I visited in the USA, I saw many strong laws related in the liquor comsumption habit. >> When I visited the USA, I saw a lot of laws realated to drinking alcohol (laws are made to be strong)They must not carry liquor in the car. Also they are checking ID when they sell liquor. >> They are not allowed to carry liqour in the car, they also ask for an ID at the liqour store.There are so many problems because of liquor. In case, a drunken driver driving a car is very dangerous, but it happens frequantly. If I were to make a new law, pub could not open after 12 AM. >> There are so many problems because of drinking liqour, like drunk driving, it is very dangerous, but it usually happens, if I were to make a new law, pubs should close 12 AM.

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