Lisa's diary

2011-02-21 · 첨삭 강사 Christine

학생이 쓴 원문

Today is Ji-won's birthday. To my surprise Jeong-seop's birthday is same. Two people are my best friends. I bought some presents for them and I gave presents. I hope they like those. One present is body lotion and body wash for Ji-won. Those items are effictive for reducing her weight. The other present is face lotion for Jeong-seop. I celebrate thier birthday. but I'm sad because my purse is much lighter.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Lisa!!! Happy Monday!! I hope you had a great weekend!! See you later in class ^^,

Today is Ji-won's birthday.

>> Correct.
To my surprise Jeong-seop's birthday is same.

>> To my surprise, they have the same birthday with Jeong-seop.
Two people are my best friends.

>> These two are my best friends.
I bought some presents for them and I gave presents.
>> I bought them some presents.

I hope they like those.
>> I hope they liked them.

One present is body lotion and body wash for Ji-won.
>>  I bought a body lotion for Jeong-seop and a body-wash for Ji-won.

Those items are effictive for reducing her weight.

>> Those items are effective for weight loss.
The other present is face lotion for Jeong-seop.
>> Correct!

I celebrate thier birthday.

>> We celebrated their birthday.
but I'm sad because my purse is much lighter.

>> But I뭢 sad because my purse is now much lighter.

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