Lisa's Diary
학생이 쓴 원문
Today is very awful.
Because one person of gangsters terribly called me.
I was fearful.
It is first.
But I foung four soldiers.
So I went next to four soldiers.
I hear gangster's voice.
"Hey! Come here!"
I ran away.
Now I am safe.
Another awful reason is no stopping bleed.
Today I pull out two teeth.
Now I am biting gauze.
So I still didn't eat dinner.
I want to eat foods.
It was very awful.
강사 첨삭
~ (>_<) ~
Hi pretty Lisa!! I missed you!!
Oh, I am sad to hear what happened to you today, I hope feel okay now and that you feel safe. It’s good you met some soldiers and I am very thankful that nothing bad happened to you. I will always pray for your safety.
~ Chris ~
Today is very awful.
>> Today was an awful day.
>> Today, an awful thing happened. Because one person of gangsters terribly called me.>> I encountered a group of gangsters and one of them was calling my attention.
OR >> There was a member of a gang who was shouting at me.
I was fearful.>> It was a very scary moment for me.
It is first.>> It was the first time it happened.
But I foung four soldiers.>> Luckily, I spotted four soldiers.
OR >> I was fortunate because there were four soldiers nearby.
So I went next to four soldiers.>> So I went near them.
OR >> So I tried to move closer to where the soldiers were.
I hear gangster's voice. "Hey! Come here!">> I heard one of the gangsters saying “Hey! Come here!”
I ran away.>> Good sentence.
Now I am safe.>> Good sentence.Another awful reason is no stopping bleed.
>> Another reason why I felt awful is because my gums still keep bleeding.
>> I feel awful due to another reason, my gums are still bleeding.Today I pull out two teeth.
>> Today, I had two of my teeth pulled out. Now I am biting gauze.
>> Now, I am biting a gauze.So I still didn't eat dinner.
>> So I still haven’t eaten dinner yet.I want to eat foods.
>> I want to eat food.
OR >> I want to eat many food.It was very awful.
>> Good sentence.
~ I hope you’re not that in pain too. See you later in class. ^^,
Thanks for doing your homework again. ~
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