Lisa's Diary
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It was rain that concluds radioactivity.
However, It's not fatal.
In korea, many people took thier umbrellra and put on raincoat.
Media told us It's not fatal.
But I don't believe that downrightly.
Japan release polluted water.
So It have a bad effect on fish.
radioactivity accumulation is caused a deformed child.
It is awful.
강사 첨삭
Hi, good evening Lisa!!
Great to see your diary contents posted here again. I agree that we all should take all necessary precautions to avoid any possible dangers to our health.
I do hope that this minor problem won't get worse.
Have a great and safe night. ^^,
See you later!!!
~ T. Christine ~
It was rain that concluds radioactivity.
>> Today, there were traces of radioactive materials found in the rain.However, It's not fatal.
>> However, it's not that dangerous to human health.In korea, many people took thier umbrellra and put on raincoat.
>> In Korea, many people took out their umbrellas and put on raincoats. Media told us It's not fatal. But I don't believe that downrightly.
>> The media told us that it was not that deadly, but I don't fully believe it.
Japan release polluted water.
>> Japan released polluted water.>> Water being released from Japan was polluted.
So It have a bad effect on fish.>> So it has bad effects on fish.
radioactivity accumulation is caused a deformed child.>> Too much exposure to radioactivity can cause child deformities to pregnant women.
It is awful.
>> Correct!
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